Peer Review on a Paper on U.S.Inequality
Now that you have submitted your initial draft of your paper comparing inequality in another country to U.S. inequality, the next phase of the assignment is peer review. In the First Draft assignment at Canvas, you will find the words "Assigned Peer Reviews," with two links, which are probably both called "Anonymous User." These are the drafts written by two of your classmates that have been randomly assigned to you. When you click on one of them, you will link to the file that classmate turned in. Please try to open each of the two files as soon as possible. If you can't open or otherwise read one or both of them, contact me immediately.
As part of your assessment, you will give each draft a score between 0 and 5 (including all decimal numbers), with 0 the lowest possible score and 5 the highest. To help you score a paper, you can use the rubric that is in the writing assignment document at Sakai Resources, though you do not need to provide a score for every category listed in the rubric, just one overall score. Your scores will not affect your classmates' grades on their assignment--think of it as a way of telling them how much extra work they need to do on their final draft. You should also (more importantly) provide written comments. Specific, constructive advice about how to improve the paper is the best kind of comment. There will surely be at least five or six things to say about any paper. Also, even though your review is anonymous, don't say anything you wouldn't say to a person directly--the purpose of peer review is to help each other write better papers. Although your scores will not affect your classmates' grades, you are being graded on your comments. This is mostly a check that you are taking your responsibilities as a reviewer seriously; if it's not obvious from your comments that you read the paper, that could lead to deductions.
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Peer Review
Student 1: First Draft
Thesis Statement
The student has made it clear that the paper is about income inequality in China and the US. They can improve the paper by writing a clear thesis statement. For example, they can say that “between China and the US, China has a higher income inequality.” This would be the thesis statement to be supported throughout the paper.
Use of Charts and Graphs
The student has supported their arguments with charts and graphs, thus providing sufficient evidence for their argument. However, the student has not assigned titles to their charts and graphs. I would recommend that the student assigns titles. For example, the first chart in the introduction part of the paper can be titled “Figure 1: Changes in Income Distribution in China and the US (1978-2014)”. This will make it clear which chart the student is referring to in their discussion.
Balance between Arguments and Discussions about Both Countries
The student has done an excellent job in discussing the evolution and causes of income inequality in China. They have supported their arguments sufficiently; however, there is a lack of balance because they have not given the US similar attention in the discussion. How has income inequality evolved in the US? What have been the causes? Including a similar discussion in the US will provide sufficient information for the comparison.
Citation
The student has provided citations for all the quotations used in the paper. However, they have failed to indicate the sources of the figures, charts, and graphs used in the paper. It is advisable to cite the sources of any information, including im...
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