Patriarchy in the Asian World
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First Reading
Read the entire document once, without stopping to make any notes. Then, answer the following questions for your peer.
- What was your first impression of their analysis?
- Imagine you are the audience they have written to. How would you react?
- What is one thing you immediately liked about their paper (something effective)?
- Is there any advice you would give this writer after your first read?
Second Reading
Read the memo a second time more slowly, while stopping to make notes in the text or as comments as you wish. Common notes include notes of the effectiveness of their ideas, paragraphs or sentences you feel are persuasive and well written, places where you are confused, or edits for grammar and style. Consider the assignment handout and rubric as you give feedback. Then, answer the following questions.
- What strengths are present in this paper?
- Do you think this analysis will be persuasive to the target audience? Why or why not?
- Did the writer include a clear introduction? A conclusion?
- Is the supporting evidence for the analysis provided in the memo fully developed and descriptive? Give at least one example of an effective detail and one that needs revision.
- Is the memo well organized and are sentences well connected to each other (transitions and content in a logical order)? Give an example of an area that can use revision.
- In general, where can the writer edit or revise to improve? Provide a specific list of changes you suggest and places in the memo on which they need to focus.
Final Comments
Add anything else you’d like them to know about your reading of the analysis, focusing on at least one strength and one revision as a summary.
Patriarchy in the Asian World
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September 26, 2023
Patriarchy, an intricate and deeply entrenched system that perpetually posits men at the pinnacle of societal structures and confines women to its peripheries, has pervaded civilizations across the globe. While it's tempting to regard this as a universal phenomenon, its manifestations and implications can vary widely depending on regional, cultural, and historical contexts. Asia, with its rich tapestry of cultures, traditions, and histories, offers a particularly compelling lens to understand these variances. Over the years, Asian women have broken barriers, challenged norms, and carved spaces for themselves in myriad sectors. However, this progression hasn't been without its challenges. The specter of patriarchal traditions, often interwoven with cultural norms and religious beliefs, casts long and sometimes stifling shadows over their achievements and aspirations.
Delving deeper into the Asian context, it's crucial to recognize that the continent is not monolithic. It's a vast mosaic of cultures, each with its own set of patriarchal challenges. From the 'bride price' traditions in certain Chinese rural communities to stringent gender roles in South Asian societies, the facets of patriarchy are multifaceted. Yet, there's a common thread - a legacy of norms and practices that