Critique: The Moves That Matter in Academic Writing
Read a selection of your colleagues' postings.
Respond by Day 5 with a critique of at least one of your colleagues' postings using one or more of the techniques from this week’s reading:
•Offer and support an opinion with a citation.
•Validate an idea with your own experience.
Critique this using the readings from- you did a paper for me on this reading about Kimmel and Garibald
Review the following required resources in The Longman Writer: Rhetoric, Reader, Research Guide, and Handbook:
◦Chapter 18 selection, "How the Schools Shortchange Boys" by Gerry Garibaldi (pp. 441–445)
◦Chapter 18 selection, "A War Against Boys?" by Michael Kimmel (pp. 447–452)
◦Part VI, "A Concise Handbook"
◾"Verbs" (pp. 611–615)
◾"Pronouns" (pp. 615–622)
◾"Modifiers" (pp. 622–624)
•Review Chapters 6 and 7 in They Say/I Say: The Moves That Matter in Academic Writing (pp. 78–101).
•What techniques can you use to anticipate the objections of skeptics to your writing? How can you persuade your audience to care about what you have to say?
•Reflect on how Kimmel critiques Garibaldi's argument. How does Kimmel argue his point?
•Think about how Kimmel shows what “they say" and what "I say." What techniques does he use to respond to the naysayer? How does he show how Garibaldi is right or wrong?
Critique
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The posting by this student regarding the views of Kimmel in response to what Garibaldi said are justified since they are entirely backed by statistical data that is well structured. Garibaldi’s argument on how the schools are pushing boys out of school is vague since he failed to incorporate factual information to back up his claims. There is an incident where the writer has captured an example where Garibaldi says, "Only 65% of boys earned high school diplomas in 2003 compared to 72% of girls…..". Such information is not correct looking the statistics revealed by Kimmel. These statistics reveal the facts as they are in the real sense. Kimmel says, ", "Another problem is that the frequently cited numbers are misleading….In 1960, 54% of boys and 38% of girls went directly to college [from high school]; today the numbers are 64% of boys and 70% of girls" (2006).
I am in full support of the views expressed by Kimmel as outlined by the article since he is an analyst that has gone a notch higher to analyze the information critically thus coming up with facts that...